Wednesday, March 19, 2008

my 1st poem

okie heres a piece of accident.... my 1st attempt at poetry after a 4 year break..


The night of the full moon,
The lonely sea shore.
The waves kissing the walking feet.

The walk on the wet sand,
Hand in hand
Admiring the moonAnd
the stars
The cupid strikes.

A feeling fills up,
The heart beat rises high up,
The instant proposal,The spontaneous acceptance,
The joy , the embrace;
The drizzle, the warmth;
The hunger, the kiss;
The locking lips;
two bodies one soul;
two hearts one beat;

Eternity ; peace

8 comments:

Dark Angel said...

ooohhh someones gettin romantic !!! hehe... great job !

CreativeEye said...

What's going on sis! Is everything alright??? :).

phoenix said...

romantic.........and to be frank......a bit pathetic........

A feeling fills up,
The heart beat rises high up,
The instant proposal,The spontaneous acceptance,

anyways.....may be its cos after 4 yrs tht u are trying....i know u can improve.....waiting for few more of such creativities from u.....
bye bye sue.....

nidhi said...

thanx phoenix for the read hope ill keep up to yer expectations next time...

SPECTRUM said...

nice poem sue!!!
good work... :)

Darth Vin Ode said...

Sue since when? :D wonderfully written!!!!

Sammok said...

Wow... nice flow :) superbly put.

I'm a sucker for romantic poems, yeah. :D

susie said...

thanx spectrum, darthy, sam :)